English 1
November 3, 2010
My Brother
My Brother is unique person. He is a naughty boy in my family. He after school always play computer games ex "Point Blank". He is too lazy to study. His score is going down. But he has good ability besides his bad habit. His ability is very good at playing soccer. At school, he becomes the leader of the soccer team. We hope that he can improve his score in school and have a good score for graduation.
Good introduction sentence for the paragraph, Fildza. How old is your brother, by the way? I like how you conclude your paragraph.
BalasHapusWriting feedback : Revise sentences #3, 6 and the last one :)_
He will grow older later and know whats good and bad for him fildza
BalasHapussupprot yoour brother slowly for he can study hard .
BalasHapusYou have to let you know that online gaming is not good for a student like your brother!!!
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